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semper_paratus

Entry: Buffy the Vampire Slayer - TV series - A12979993
Author: The_Xand... Buffy maybe gone, but true fans live on!! - U541442

Although this is an update, it is a complete re-write as I felt the original page at A315893 was severely lacking in information.


A12979993 - Buffy the Vampire Slayer - TV series

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Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor - Towel Day!

This is greatsmiley - okvery thorough - well done

smiley - vampire


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Post 3

semper_paratus

Thank you. You've been a great guide through this, I was starting to get a little confused, but I think I'm getting an idea of how it all works now.


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Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor - Towel Day!

smiley - biggrin
You're welcome, I'm happy to helpsmiley - ok

I recall the original entry going through to edited status, it was a very long time ago, so this update is going to be greatsmiley - biggrin

A couple of things I noticed on second run-through:

smiley - biroSeasson 1 has an extra "s"

smiley - biroFootnote one "sarah" needs to have a capital "S"

smiley - biro(Known as 'The Scoobies') = (known as 'The Scoobies')

smiley - biro10th March 1997 = house-style for dates is: 10 March, 1997

smiley - tea

Your last header "In The End" can you put the text after it into tags, so it separates from the header smiley - smiley

smiley - tea

Your headers "What is a Slayer" and "What is a Watcher" need to either:
Have a question mark at the end - or - turn them round thus:
"What Slayers Are" and "What Watchers Are"

smiley - tea

I've re-read your entry and I can't find an explanation for "Potentials" - I know what you mean because I watch the show - but other people may not know so you need to clarify that they're Slayers-in-waiting (or your own words...) a footnote or one sentence after you mention them would work I reckonsmiley - ok

smiley - tea

smiley - biroFootnote 8 appears after the full-stop, it needs to be before the full-stop.

That's it, I think, smiley - goodluck with thissmiley - towel


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Galaxy Babe - eclectic editor - Towel Day!

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smiley - birocut that out of the "What is a Slayer" section and make it your introduction to "What is a Watcher" and you can add your explanation to what a Potential is after "another"

thus:

When one Slayer dies, another (called a 'Potential') is called and trained by a Watcher. A Watcher serves by guiding the Slayer on her path. It is the Watchers destiny to guide the Slayer.


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Post 6

Elentari

My understanding was that the potentials were girls who could theoretically be called to be slayers. Once one slayer dies and the next was called from the potentials, that girl would no longer be a potential, so I'm not sure your suggestion really works, GB.


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Post 7

semper_paratus

I've actually made some changes to the 'What is a Slayer' section, to include some information about the Potentials. All other changes have been made.


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Post 8

Elentari

It's very good but I have a few points to make.

Firstly, there are quite a few speeling mistakes. Can you run it through a spell-checker?

Secondly, there are a number of spoilers. Could you include a spoiler warning in the introduction?

Thirdly, it seems to me that you don't really explain about Buffy's world at the beginning. Perhaps a section explaining about vampires, demons, the hellmouth, the slayer etc.

There are also quite a few words italiscised where this is not neccessary.

Anyway, great job! smiley - smiley


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Post 9

semper_paratus

I'll go through the spelling and the other points.

I don't understand what you mean about spoilers though, the shows been over for a couple of years now and the BBC have shown all episodes.


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Not him

And those people whho still haven't seen them or might be inspired to see them by the entry? Could do with being warned, I feel.


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Post 11

Elentari

It's standard for tv entries.


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Post 12

semper_paratus

Okay, spelling mistakes done and I'll put a spoiler warning in.


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Post 13

semper_paratus

I've added the warning to the title


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Elentari

Sorry, but it can't stay in the title. The best place would be after the first paragraph. Just write something like: "Please note that this entry will contain some significant spoilers for all seven series of the programme."

Sorry if I sound harsh; I really do think this is good and deserves to get into the guide, but because this is the update forum not peer review, we can't rely on sub editors so we have to get it right here!

smiley - biggrin


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Post 15

semper_paratus

I'll have to think about what else I can add as a further explanation. I do think the entirity of the article does give many of the explanations required, but I will see what I can do.


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Post 16

semper_paratus

no problem. I don't mind ideas, the more the merrier.

I want to get it right myself.


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Post 17

Elentari

smiley - ok


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Post 18

semper_paratus

One other thing. I was considering placing the 'What is a Slayer' and 'What is a Watcher' after the cast, rather than right at the bottom of the page. What do you think?


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Post 19

Elentari

It would probably be better in terms of explaining the premise of the show. smiley - smiley


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Post 20

semper_paratus

Okay, I've taken all on board and made quite a few changes. Namely, an entirely new section, with more of an explanation about the show.


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